Draco has some real anger issues, but then again, who wouldn't, lol...and when you wrote that part about him tearing his clothes out of the drawers, I thought you were saying he was tearing his clothes OFF! lol!
Draco's memory/vision thingy was really great! it kind of reminded me of that corny stuff you see in the ,ovies or on T.V, but yours wasn't corny, it came off really sweet. You know how Harry always sees his parents? Maybe soemday Draco could see Narcissa's ghost for a moment or two? Maybe...
I don't think it matters that it wasn't action-filled, lol. I think you wrote exceptionally powerful emotional scenes as well.
I liked Hermione's point of veiw best of all. Kind of gives an aside veiw from the main point. I like this line: "Was Draco to be used like this at every twist and turn? His entire life being thrown over so that everyone else could be happy?"
Hermoine's dream was really powerful and slightly scary too, lol. I really liked it. Once again, I like how you've demonstrated the cruelness of that dingbat Lucius Malfoy...
I think you're an amazing writer, with a wicked good talent for using words the way you want to, and making them sound great. I wish I could do that half as good as you.
It never occured to me to wonder where his broom went, but you seem to be making a point of it, as does everyone else, so now my curiosity is piqued! You HAVE to update soon, so I can find out what is so special and important about the broom, and where the bloody hell it went!
Emotional Ties