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Reviewer: butter_beer_drinker (Signed)
04/30/2009 11:52 pm

Wow you have really drawn me into this already.  I love your use of descriptions and the banter between all your characters.

~Kristy




Chapter One: A Decade Begins…
Reviewer: butter_beer_drinker (Signed)
04/30/2009 08:37 pm

Nice start I shall conmtinue to read to see where this leads.

~Kristy




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Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
08/20/2006 12:34 pm

Such an inriguing beginning!  I can't decide whether Rowena is a vengeful, pouting child, a visionary rebel, or a far-seeing sage.  but that's what good stories are made of--doubts and unrest and strife.  I like your way of expressing yourself.  you seem to be pushing the boundaries of word meanings, but that can work to transport the reader to a new place and time.

I hope to read more of this.




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Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
04/21/2006 08:43 am

Marvelous chapter! Yup, this cinches it: you're brilliant. I really, really love your writing style, and this chapter shone dispite a few minor grammatical errors. "Rowena, being of the delicate sex, was not allowed to attend." The way you phrase things really takes me right into the story; it's amazing.

Plot-wise as well, I love how this is coming together. Each character's viewpoint is unique, fresh, and completely believable, which is hard to do. I loved the 'inquisitive questions' line; the repetition there seemed really effective.

At one point I think you mentioned a bow and then clarified it as "well, half of one, anyway" or something to that effect, and the clarified sentence seemed not to quite fit the same tone as the rest of the piece and was a bit unnecessary, but that's my only real nitpick.

Great job on this, and I can't wait for more! I never read founder!fiction, but yours is so deliciously wonderful that I can't help myself. Thanks for this, and do take care! 



Author's Response: Hey, thanks again for the review. The grammatical errors were a mistake (no duh) and I'll try to fix them for th next one, which is to be posted soon. Hopefully with in the next week or so, but I am not making any promises. I have read a bunch of your stories and find them to be literary master pieces. -Jo



Chapter One: A Decade Begins…
Reviewer: Madeline Fabray (Signed)
04/21/2006 03:30 am
I think "Okay" is more of a modern word, but I'm liking this so far.

Author's Response: Totally. Ir really struggled to come up with a better term for that and some of the things while, fitting in other places did not fit in that particular scene. And, every body can connect with "Okay". 'As you wish" and "Assuredly" are not used as much.



Chapter One: A Decade Begins…
Reviewer: Madeline Fabray (Signed)
04/21/2006 03:20 am
A very interesting start. I love your descriptions, and in less than 1,000 words, there is already a lot of tension and conflict.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing. I'm glad it was intertaining, 'cause that is what I do. Conflict, while intended though was not the main point of the chapter, but I'm not complaining if that's the way it came across. Conflict, afterall, is the base of many relationships.



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Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
04/18/2006 09:46 pm

Ohmigod. This is breathtaking. This is moving. This is brilliant.

...why has nobody reviewed it yet? They're mad, they must be.

Well, the only solution is for you to POST MORE of this, and soon because I'm going spare (Oh, Rowena is so perfect, and Godric is so right, and this is so promising), and then I will pimp it out to all my friends and make the masses read this.

Brilliant start. Thanks for this, and do take care.



Author's Response: Hey, thanks for reviewing. It was awesome. As for posting more, the next chapter should be posted today. Thank you agains for reviewing, I swear I must have jumped up and down squealing for I think eight minutes.



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