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Reviewer: mythic77 (Signed)
01/07/2007 04:49 pm
While not a H/Hr shipper, I do enjoy H/Hr stories.  The problem here is that you drew Ginny grossly OOC.  She is one of the least needy characters in JKR's world, so I couldn't lend credence to the rest of the story.


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Reviewer: Fiery Angel (Signed)
08/27/2006 09:55 am
a good little story! very cute and fluffy!!



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Reviewer: Dementor149 (Anonymous)
04/18/2006 07:59 am

I really enjoyed your story. I did find the way you changed from first to third person somewhat distracting. You need to decide which you want to use and stick to it.

This passage is an example:

She’s smart, pretty, has always been loyal to me, pretty, fun when she loosens up, beautiful, powerful, gorgeous…

And that’s when he had realized he had fallen for her. He loved everything about her. The way her hair rustled in the wind, the way she chewed on her bottom lip when she was concentrating, the way her whole face lit up when she smiled, the way her eyes sparkled when she was excited or happy, and the way that she always made him feel better.

Taking the first person narration into the second paragraph it should read like this:

And that’s when I realized that I had fallen for her. I loved everything about her. The way her hair rustled in the wind, the way she chewed on her bottom lip when she was concentrating, the way her whole face lit up when she smiled, the way her eyes sparkled when she was excited or happy, and the way that she always made me feel better.

See what I mean? That said it was an enjoyable read and I hope to see more of your work.



Author's Response: Oh, oops!!!  Sorry!!!!  But thanks anyways!!!



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Reviewer: Pianochic1703 (Signed)
04/17/2006 04:51 pm
Wow!!! I have to say that this is one of the sweetest H/Hr ships I have read. Although I am slightly partial to H/G, I do love to read a great story with Harry and Hermione. Keep it up, good job!!!


Author's Response: Thank you so much!  I'm really glad that you liked it!



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Reviewer: Lionz_4_the_Cup (Signed)
04/16/2006 07:18 pm

good job...In the beginning, though, would Hermione actually go down into Knockturn Alley because she was curious (something like that, I forget the reason :D sorry) ? Anyways, nice ending, I thought it was really well done.



Author's Response: Well thank you for reviewing...I'm not sure if she would, but hey!  lol...I'm glad that you enjoyed it!



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