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Reviewer: Madeline Fabray (Signed)
04/14/2006 05:21 am

"I didn’t think we’d be meeting up quite so soon, Sophia, darling," Sirius began, holding a magical pack of ice to his right eye, "but I sincerely want to thank you for putting me in my place back there. I have to be slapped every once in awhile, mainly just because otherwise I would have no physical contact with the opposite sex at all."

You should submit that as a quote for the forum *snicker*

I think Rodolphus and Rabastan (I assume Sophie's father) are brothers -- unless this is another Rodolphus, which is entirely possible. If that's the case, nevermind.

Is Lucius supposed to be in the same year as Sophie, Lily, et al? I'm not 100 percent sure on this, but I think Lucius is actually a good deal older than the Mauraders -- at least three or four years older.

Author's Response:

lol thank you for your review! I enjoyed it! I'm not exactly sure of the lineage with the Lestranges.  This was written before HP6, and I (quite sadly, as I have had multiple mistakes pointed out to me) didn't check HP Lexicon before I wrote it.  Lucius was younger intentionally, he is older than Lily and James in the books, but I wanted someone who was a feasible cousin to Sophie that we all actually knew about. 

I'm really glad you liked that quote! Once again, you totally nailed my favorite line in the chapter! Hah!

Thank you again for your review, and I appreciate that you didn't mind giving some constructive criticism- it was good hearing your concerns.

Thanks again, and I hope to hear from you when it gets updated again!

Beginning of a Lifestyle
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
04/13/2006 10:18 pm

Nice job! Your Lily is really good, I can tell you put a lot of effort into her. I hope you'll try and bring a little more originality to Sophie, though... she's sort of anti-canon so I hope you'll throw in some unpredictable twists for her along the way.

A great start, though, and I loved the discussion when Lily didn't know how to get on the platform. Keep it up!

Author's Response:

Yeah, Lily's discussion with the boys was pretty fun to write :D.  I'm glad you liked my Lily, because I definitely did put a lot of effort into her.  Basically, I compacted my personality into an eleven-year-old.  But it was still a lot of effort, lol. 

What does anti-canon really mean? That it's unusual in the books for dark side families to break away?  It is unusual, granted, but not unheard of.  Sophia develops a bit more as the chapters go on...if she still has the same issues you were concerned about come the next chapter, please let me know explicitly what they are so we can tweak her a bit.

Thank you very much for your review!

Beginning of a Lifestyle
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