Reviews For For Duty and Honor

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Reviewer: applesollie (Signed)
04/28/2006 12:02 pm
Yay. Someone is coming to Harry's rescue.

Author's Response: In a way.  Really, he's just doing his job.



Chapter 1: Orsa
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
04/26/2006 06:07 am

I liked the conversation between McGonagall and Snape at the end there, planning the House meetings and discussing Umbridge. It felt very real.

Be careful on your twinspeak, though; while Fred and George do have a tendency to finish each others' thoughts, they don't alternate speech every two words or so. :) Just a thought there.

I wasn't a big fan of Severus working with the twins there - I'm not one for pranking in general, though, in fanfic - but I liked the initial nervous reaction of the twins; that was done well.

Keep up the good work, and I absolutely can't wait for more!



Author's Response:

Severus informed me that unless I let him have some sort of revenge, there would be... reprecussions.  *g*  And the twins were kinda nervous... I guess it's more fanon, but I've known identical twins IRL who fall back into twinspeak when they're 1) messing with people's minds or 2) nervous and/or worried.  ;)

I'm glad you liked Snape and McGonagall trying to figure out what to do; seemed to me that neither one would appreciate another member of the faculty using a cursed item on the children.  Happy you're enjoying this, and look for chapter six sometime next week! 




Chapter 5: Animadverto
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
04/18/2006 08:15 pm

Great chapter! I like that Harry has mixed emotions on McGonagall, because I felt the exact same way reading that. The conversation and comfort between Ron and Harry was absoultely brilliant, and it stole my heart.

 Awesome job! Can't wait for more!



Author's Response: Thank you!  Right now, Harry's got mixed emotions about much of what's going on.  He's angry, but he's not.  He's terrified about what's going to happen, but he's also not focusing on it, either.  He trusts his friends, but not the adutls.  *shrug* As teenagers go, Harry's a bit more mixed up than most right now.



Chapter 4: Eventus
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
04/13/2006 03:39 pm
Ah! I want more! You've no ideas how many times I kept clicking until this chapter was validated, because last night WT said it existed but wasn't validated yet, and it was driving me mad. This was every bit as good as I'd hoped for (and expected, to be honest), so thanks for keeping up the quality. Amazing job so far, and I hope you update soon!

Author's Response: It will be updated again next week.  :) I just stumbled across this site, and I had to get it caught up wo where I'm posting everywhere else.  I'm glad you're enjoying this!



Chapter 3: Discenda et Culpa
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
04/12/2006 03:10 pm

Ooh, this was a good chapter. I'd expected Harry to be a little more upset over the Snape thing, but he got there in the end. This was hard to read, but appropriately so (not the grammar, the subject).

Your best line, IMHO, was: "Dudley's baggy hand-me-downs could hide a multitude of sins."

Ace job on this. I'll keep reading!



Author's Response: Harry's problem is that he doesn't quite know what to feel.  He's been angry a lot over various things lately, and he just doesn't know how to feel now. 



Chapter 2: Percunctor
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
04/12/2006 03:00 pm

This is a brilliant start and you manage to write Severus pretty well. The emotions here are great, and I can't wait to see how Harry reacts to all this...

I'll keep reading now, I just wanted to give you my thoughts as they came. I'd hate to deprive you of well-deserved reviews! ;)



Author's Response: Thank you!  I'm worried about writing Harry actually.  Teenagers are something I don't do much of.



Chapter 1: Orsa
Reviewer: TGinAZ (Anonymous)
04/12/2006 10:32 am

Wow! A quote from Thomas S. Monson in a HP fanfic! That has got to be a first!  At lease I think I know where you hang out on Sundays--the same place I do.

So far, so good.  Keep it up!

--TGinAZ (azinfinit (at) netscape (dot) net) 



Author's Response: LOL!  Yep, you're right.  But, well, it fit.  I've an ongoing quote file that I use for stories.  It's currently 32 pages long, and I keep adding to it.  Whenever I find a good one, it goes into the file... I've everything from religious leaders to politicians to writers.  Comes in useful--if you read enough fanfic, you'll notice that a high percentage of the good ones have quotes at the beginning of chapters.  Strange, but true.



Chapter 1: Orsa
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