Author's Response:
thank you, glad you enjoyed it!!
Fruit Punch
Reviews For Fruit Punch
Reviewer: destin4fl (Anonymous)
04/04/2006 12:38 pm
Reviewer: ladylarna (Signed)
04/03/2006 09:14 pm
Haha! That ending completely made me snort with laughter (a good thing). This was an interesting piece; your dialouge could use some work (try to make it flow a bit more naturally), but you really captured action and movement quite well (the looking at each other, emotions in eyes, etc). Nice job on this, and hoorah for seeing some Hufflepuffs as well! :)
Take care!
Author's Response: thanks for the compliments and the advice i'll try to keep it in mind next time:D
Fruit Punch