Author's Response: Thank you. This song just touched me so much that I had to do something with it. I'm really glad you enjoyed it!
Author's Response: I hoped there might be but it is looking like this will remain forever unfinished. Sorry :-(
Author's Response: Thank you! I love the song too... it's very powerful to me.
Author's Response: Thank you!! I'm glad you enjoyed it :-)
Author's Response: Thank you... I'm glad I posted it ;-)
I think you've captured Giny's character very well. You show her mood swings (she loves him--she loves him not--she'll leave him--she'll leave him not)--definitely the way pregnancy works.
I have a little trouble believing in your Harry though--only visiting long enough to get the poor girl pregnant.
You have a nice way with a phrase. I particularly like:
"...I am determined never to regret anything we have done together..."
"...I feel like a terrible mother for only wanting you..."
"...Tom wants me dead because it will break you."
"Still waiting for your stuborn son to make his way into the world." (tee-hee!)
You give Ginny and Harry's history in bits and pieces thorugh out Ginny's writing. I like this much better than lumping it all at the beginning like a news article. She also glosses rumors of the progress in the hunt for Tom. Both of these devices add interest and drive the story forward.
I'm not very good with songfics. They are hard to write I think. The hardest part is finding the right song. I think you picked a good one for your story. But when I read one, I like all the lyrics to fit well with the author's storyline. Yours does most of the time, though not always. F'rinstance, the song talks about crying and screaming and tears, but then you say Harry and Lils are 'stoic.' And when I read 'resonating life', I expected to hear more about Harry's bravery. But that's just me.
So, nice job for your first songfic.
Author's Response: Thank you for your honesty and taking the time to tell me everything, I appreciate that a whole lot in a review! You're right, the song didn't completely fit but I wrote it for someone who wrote a story called "Evanescence" without knowing this song and so it sort of flowed from that. I seriously debated not publishing it because it is pretty personal to me but I'm glad I did. Your comments will help me for if/when I ever write another song fic! Again, many thanks!