He was homeless. ---
*Very* nice. lol Poor Ron. He can be clueless. (And once again I misread "shrunken trunks" as "shrunken heads" I must have those on my mind.)
"have a good snog"?! LOL
You might not want to use the expresison "shoe on the other foot" too often.
Hmm. I think Hary will regret it if he leaves Ginny behind. For a good relationship, one can;t be over protective of another. It puts the one being protected in a lesser position. One not able to make their own decisions or take care of themselves.
---"You mean they both ended up with a present they couldn’t use?" Ron asked, horrified.---
---"Maybe regular shagging will help."---
Whoo! She certainly doesn;t mince words. Impropriety detectors... That's Molly all right. Whoops! Krum will be there. Sheesh. "Jean-Lucifer"? lol Again you have a way with words!
As I hsve said, I am not a fan of romance, but this story's not *too* thick with it and I am enjoying the other plots. Nice chapter! Nice interactionas. It could use some more narration though, instead of just telling the reader what everyone is doing. You get into the emptions pretty well, but again some mood setting would really bring the chapter out.
Hello! Me again! When I review a story, I review the good and the bad. I hope that it will help and that you take it in the spirit it's intended; to be helpful. I am enjoying this story a great deal, and if I didn't, I wouldn;t take the time. : )
:sniggers at the beginning of chapter 2:: Nice
description, I love it. --Uncle Vernon must be loving this.-- Why is that..? Hermione is deluded. That's all I've got to say! LOL! Tell the shower how hot! That's great. I enjoy how you contrast the Muggle and wizard worlds.
---He could never allow any of them to become another spare--- Oo, "spare". Nice. I love the transformed cat flap!
Items-That-Can't-Be-Named... lol You have a way with words!
---For several days, their paths and Dudley’s hadn’t crossed, but on a sunny afternoon when the trio had abandoned Harry’s room to sit in the back garden that all changed.--- That seemed to me to be an abrupt transition. And about the gnome, in canon, Ron had seen gnomes, the Muggle kind, before. He said something like "I;ve seen what Muggles think are gnomes, like fat little Father Christmases with fishing poles." Then he went ahead to show Harry a real gnome.
---"I could make them do anything I wanted, couldn’t I?"--- Ooooo. Bad sign. LOL "Mubbles"?
---Hermione’s attempts at striking up a friendship with Aunt Petunia had continued, but they had – of course – been futile--- I didn;t think that the "had" was necessary there...makes it sound like an afterthought.
I absolutely LOVED Ron's telling off the Dursleys! And I really like Hermione's telling them off also, though it seemed awkward to me, that scene. Like Harry and Ron's reactions didn;t seem to jibe with the seriousness of the situationm and how Hermione was willing to use Levicorpus on the Dursleys for how they had treated Harry. It's a serious moment (GOOD FOR HERMIONE! !) but it seemed a little rushed and...the boys' amused reactions seemed to take away from what could have been a far more chilling or striking scene. The amusement part, I think, would work better after the fact. Wonderful chapter!
Author's Response: Yeah, I suppose a lot of our stories will be similar simply because of the narrow guidelines JKR left us with. Still, it's interesting to see how differently they can be interpreted.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'm sorry for the delay. My beta and I had a huge breakdown in communication this chapter. I promise, chapter six is already with her and she's working on it.
Amazing. I will forever envy your ability to sew stories together realistically... your blending of hilarious and serious moments is so natural, and I very much admire it.
Wonderful chapter - the twins made me giggle, you do them well - and do update soon! Thanks so much for this, and take care!
Author's Response: Thanks so much, I'm glad you're enjoying it. The twins are fun, aren't they? I'm very fond of the twins - I'm glad they amused you.
Author's Response: Aww, thank you! That's how I write, too - with pictures in my mind so I'm glad it works for you.
This was a marvelous chapter as usual! The wedding attack isn't a new idea, but you wrote it quite well. The dance partner section was extremely interesting, and I must admit my favorite line in the whole thing was this: "She was stunning, and he was lost."
So perfect. Absolutely perfect. Marvelous job, and thanks for this!
Author's Response: Aww, thanks! I'm glad you pointed that line out, actually. I kind of liked it myself, hee.
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you're enjoying it. I'm having a lot of fun writing this one.