You know, I knew something was wrong with that. I like how you made it a sad/happy ending. Most people aren't realistic about things. You've got my respect for that. On the other hand, I think you could use a lot more work with background and description. Everything felt rushed and like a blur. I never really got settled in a room, you know. The settings were always hazy. The dialogue was great, though and you did well keeping everyone in character, which can be hard to do. Good job!
Author's Response: First off, thank you for your honesty. I'm happy someone has the guts to come out and tell me how it is. Second off, I guess it was not clear as to where everything was -- but thank you. I'm happy you thought it was good :o)
Your first paragraph was just amazing, with its descriptions -- I like the spider web allusion. Ver bittersweet ending, especially the line "they'll be here shortly." Wow.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review, that paragraph was originally for another one of my stories but then morphed into what is now 'Hero.' Thanks so much for reviewing -- it means a lot!
Wow, I adored this. So many lines played with my emotions, and when Ginny found out they were dead, I immediately felt sorry for them. The last line was perfect...So very true. Great job!!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! I really appreciate that! I was hoping for this story to have an effect on people and I guess it did. Thanks for your kind review, I'm happy I was able to entertain you for a bit.
I absolutely loved this fic!! It shocked me, but it was wonderful!! The ending was beautiful. It gave me goose bumps just reading it. Great job!! :)
Ash
Author's Response: Thank you so much Ashlyn!! I really do love this story -- I think it might be one of my best. I'm happy you enjoyed it and thanks for the review =]