Heh. Dudley wants to learn magic to help block out the nasty nightmares of "rabbit food" being forced down his throat. If only his parents knew.... Good stuff. I'm curious as to the identity of the girl. You say she looks like Lily, but is it Lily? Maybe sometime in the past, when she was younger, not to mention alive? And is it just me, or do I sense a Harry/Hermione pairing in the wroks here? ;-) Just a few spelling and grammar errors here and there. Make sure to keep your story in one tense (the sentence, 'Harry stopped and notices he was thinking again,' is the only time I could see mixed tenses, and I imagine it was probably a typo. All-in-all, not a bad prologue. Let's see where it goes!
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