I like this chapter much better. It's full of action and character development.
The first lines make me feel Harry's numbness and the slowness of time for a mourner, as you list his oh-so-mundane actions.
The sardonic humor is back: "The Daily Prophet had reported twenty deaths, which meant there were at least thirty, plus more no one knew of."
The characters of Dudley and Petunia are very true-to-canon in their conversation: she gives right in to him after a very mild sparring match.
And I like Harry's relationship with Petunia. She has always seemed too-bad-to-be-true in the books.
And Snape's letter is again very like him, except for one error (which may not actually be an error because it fits his sarcastic humor perfectly): "The Dark Lord does not know your exact location, but thanks to your idiotic jaunt today, he knows the approximate area, and has planned to severely attack Little *Whining* tonight." : ) Tee-hee.