Reviews For The Healer

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Reviewer: Moonlit Tiger Lily (Signed)
01/22/2006 05:06 pm
I really liked this chapter. It flowed continuously with the last one. Even though there were Merlin knows how many years in between it didn't feel like it at all. I think this is the best chapter so far. It really pulled me in. I hardly made any corrections on it comparitively. I think you're doing very well and that you deserved to win that contest. Congratulations!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your help. I does help to improve the flow. You corrected the last one really fast and your suggestion does help with the transistion. :)



Chapter 3 – Children of Asclepius
Reviewer: Moonlit Tiger Lily (Signed)
01/21/2006 09:13 pm
You're doing very well, I'm glad to say. As your beta, I can tell more than any of your readers that you are improving. Unfortunately, historical stories don't seem to be very popular. I'm nearly done the next chapter. Hopefully your readers with increase!

Author's Response: Thanks Nicole. I just got it. Will post it ASAP.

*Squeals* I also just got word. This story is the winner for challenge it was written for :)


Chapter 2 – Epione and the Serpent
Reviewer: Lionz_4_the_Cup (Signed)
01/11/2006 04:23 pm
Venice....interesting choice of a setting...awesome all the same, though:D great job, i was kind of surprised that Nathaniel was related to Sirius.creative. awesome descriptions, too. overall, nice job. cant wait to read more!

Author's Response: ^_^ I always did find that city romantic, timeless and there’s just an air of dark mystery to it.

*grin* the use of a ‘Black ancestor’ (especially one who’s a seer) will make sense once I reach the epilogue. At the same time it does give a more HP feel to this.


Prologue
Reviewer: LunaMoon224 (Signed)
01/11/2006 10:42 am
That was very interesting and intriguing at the same time. I love reading fics with Perenelle and Nicholas in them. I'm wondering what will happen next. Great job!!

Author's Response: Thanks. The next chapter is in queue. Nicolas, Perenelle and Nathaniel are more like narrators here… I just thought that a timeless alchemist, his wife, and a young man wizard of the renaissance era would make for a more well rounded narration.

The real plot line is more of the story of Ascelpius twisted by yours truly, so to fit HP. The next chapter is has more mythological aspects, but HP-ism will penetrate more and more at each passing chapter.


Prologue
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