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Reviewer: Cody DeDannan (Signed)
04/12/2006 01:53 am
Fantastic!  A story from the POV of a dementor, and it was completely believable and very creepy.  Great mood-setting, and fantastic showing of Umbridge's character.  (That jerk.) 
 
There were only a couple of things that caught me that I might add as contructive criticisms:
 
--The sun was beginning to go down--
 
That is slightly awkward to me.  A little passive, not quite as vivid as it could be.   Perhaps a description of what happened such as: "The sky blazed with rays of red and pink as the sun dipped towards the horizon."  or something like that.  Something more active.And the "he" at the beginning...has the reader wondering who they're reading about.  (Though I get the feeling that was supposed to be that way!)  Ack, they're dementors!  LOL 
 
---The fear was radiating from the creature’s prone form like the sun, which was by now completely below the horizon---
 
Good descriptions, but a little mixed.  You go from the radiating fear, to the sun going down.  It seemed a bit like a mixed simile to me.  Maybe the fear radiated like the rays the setting sun had cast on the sky,m or something like that. 
 
I hope you do not mind my suggestions, and hope that they might be of some help!  I've added it to my favorites.


Author's Response: Not at all -- you've raised some valid issues. Thank you, and glad you enjoyed. Yes, the "he" was very deliberate, for I not only had in mind that it was a dementor, but who this dementor USED to be >:)



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Reviewer: AmericanStreetWitch (Signed)
03/08/2006 11:41 pm
did i ever mention I hate Umbridge? well i do. and you written the reason why. plus knowing what she does to Harry during school kind of intesifies it. anyways, really well written. I was kind of curious on what would make Dudley sweat.

Author's Response: Oh, me too. In some ways, I find her more detestible than Voldemort. Probably because I KNOW people like her. Yeah, that was kind of tough -- what would Dudley's worst memory be? He's so spoiled. So I thought the risk to his security, plus being exposed to his cousin's "freakishness" would do it.



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Reviewer: MuggleMomma (Anonymous)
02/05/2006 12:00 pm
April, what a fantastic one-shot. I believe it is the first thing I have read that is from the point of view of the dementors, and you captured them beautifully. It leaves me wondering, though, about them...what were they before they were dementors? One idea I have is that dementors are vanquished vampires...but that's just me. Anyway, excellent story! 10/10!

Author's Response: Thank you! Heh heh heh! I've been waiting for someone to ask this very question.JKR leaves the answer of the dementor's origins very vague. So, here is my theory. Dementors were once dark wizards, especially dark wizards who were given the dementor's kiss. Dementors have no souls themselves, so must take happiness and others' thoughts as substitution, like a drug addict abuses drugs for an artificial high. This particular dementor used to be a dark wizard. He's a new dementor, who was only turned a couple months ago (give or take). Now, which dark wizard do we know received the dementor's kiss about two moths ago. That's right...the dementor who is telling this story used to be...... Barty Crouch Jr.



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Reviewer: Illeanah (Signed)
02/04/2006 03:26 am
Interesting that you should take the point of view of a dementor. I dont' think I've read a fiction that has done that. You've shown a wonderful insight of your own imagination of what a dementor might actually be, feel (or not) and think. You've done it so well that you had sent shivers up my spine. I never thought a dementor to have power of thought... well a sense of communication between themselves. I never thought of them that way. ~ Illeanah

Author's Response: Thank you! :) I'm not sure how I got the idea, but I have a theory on how dementors are made. I know Jo Rowling has said they sort of spring from the ground, like a fungus, but that is still deliciously vague. Ever wonder what happens to dark wizards, particularly those attacked by dementors, after they die? How do dementors multiply. Here's the real kicker: Who got the dementor's kiss in canon less than two months ago, before the attack on Privet Drive? This dementor USED to have a name...not that he would recall it >:) So yes, this dementor does communicate on a pretty high level -- because he is new. That's my theory, anyway.



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Reviewer: Lionz_4_the_Cup (Signed)
01/13/2006 07:47 pm
that was probably the only fic i will ever read written from the dementors point of view in my life, and that was really good. great jobs with the emotions of the dementors, i really enjoyed that read. cant wait for more!

Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah, I'm a bit on the warped side, I admit. But I had fun. I also had some fun playing with a pet theory of mine in this...about how dementors are created, heh heh.



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Reviewer: lily 101 (Anonymous)
12/27/2005 11:15 pm
I to am warped an I loved what you did to that dialog but from the point of view of the dementeresgreat!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thank you! Not sure where this plot bunny came from. What can I say? Glad I am in good company!



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Reviewer: LunaMoon224 (Signed)
12/18/2005 08:25 pm
That was great! I like how you didn't really know what was happening until the end, because that's when you really figured out the characters. Great job!!

Author's Response: Thanks :)



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