Loving the story, I've gotta say! At first I wasn't sure what year you were placing the story in, but it got clearer after a chapter or so. I like how you've changed Harry's character slightly, but without making him completely different. He's still got a temper, but now it's smoothed out a bit with his new 'commanding' personality edge. The chapter with the lawsuit was great, too. The OC that you've put in, Elaina Lafina, I can tell already that I like her. She's a nice witch with a temper, and knows how to use it. The twist with Sirius not being dead or alive, just stuck between two planes, is a great start-off for the story. The continuation of the prophecy and the 'weapon' brings the promise of more action in later events. Currently I'm wondering just how well the search for Sirius through the veil will go, and if Aberforth hasn't done something with the Elvin rope. Plenty of questions that promise interesting answers. Your spelling, grammar, punctuation, etc. is very good-- I don't recall any errors that interrupted my reading; you should feel proud! The only thing that was a little off in your story, in my opinion, was a bit of out-of-characterness with some of the characters. The main example is Severus Snape. He seemed a little bit too...relaxed in his speech. Normally he's the sneering, greasy bat that we all know, and he's mean to everybody but perhaps Dumbledore. But you made him a little carefree, if that's the right word; he just doesn't seem so uptight. Which is good sometimes in the long run, but it was sort of abrupt. It wasn't very noticable, since he doesn't talk all that much, and you did a good job with his usual insulting manner, it was just something that I noticed. Well, good luck, and I hope you continue this soon!
*eyes go wide* James? In the mirror? I like where this is going, *laughs* I couldn't stop laughing when I read the part about Harry going into the closet, yeah, I know, I laugh at random times. The rest of the prophecy is interesting, I wonder how that's going to come into play. I mean, I know it will, but when. Great job, can't wait for the next update!!
What a wonderful chapter! And oh such a cliffy! I like the way you described Lafina and how she handled asking to be in the Order, but how she found about it is my question. I'm starting to wonder if she's all good. I can't wait to see what happens next, great job and update soon!!!
I really loved this chapter! I keep laughing at Harry's attitude...Very nice way of writing him. I like the deals Harry keeps making with Vernon. You left us with a cliffy, though, I think I already know the answer. Great job!!
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