Spotted something you might want to fix, otherwise, interesting story so far...
Pushing his hair back revealing a thin lightning bolt scar, Jason sighed. He was running late. He was supposed to have been home ten minutes ago.
David used to be a boy named Harry Potter. Two years had passed since he’d gone by that name. He was now Jason Smith.
Guessing you wanted Jason there.
Wow, the end was a big surprise. I'm thinking a memory charm, or just it could be from the battle. Very intriguing. I like how you had the same events as in canon, but made them go faster. Poor Harry, becoming distant with his friends. You know, if he wanted the training to stop, he could just break his promise to his trainers. Easy enough, even if he might have not been able to defeat Voldy. I can't wait for the next chapters! Great job!!
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