I've always loved Lily and James fics. I love the way you've portrayed Lily! I'm hooked. Great job! Rhia is perfect. A readhead has to have at least one crazy friend to keep up with her. Especially a readhead like yours. Mrs. Black was just like I would imagine her in Siri's teen years. Will the whole story be from Lily's point of view? *smiles* Guess I'll have to read to find out, eh? Lookin forward to the next chappies!
Another great chapter! I really do love the foreshadowing last paragraphs at the end of the chapters. I loved the confusion that Lily has where she doesn't know who's right for her. Great job!! Can't wait for the next chapter!
Very nice development of Lily. We don't know much about her in canon, and what we do see of her, she's always noble. Nice to see a few balancing "warts." But you don't go overboard, you can see why she is popular and well-liked.
I love how you always have the diary in the beginning, and a little conclusion/ prediction of the chapter at the end. I wonder what spell James used on Brent, seems interesting. Poor Lily, she doesn't know who to pick. I like how Lily pronounces Voldy's name, and I like how you had her learn of him. Great job, update soon!!
Another wonderful chapter! I'm really enjoying Lily's attitude, lol. I couldn't stop laughing through most of it. "What did he want from her? A kidney?" ROFL Great job! I better go and read the next chapter...
Really good! Can't wait for the next chaper!
The only thing, though, that I think I should point out is that Professor Trelawney was not a teacher in the marauder era. Just thought I should mention it, because it might cause some problems later on if you decide to write until Lily and James' death.
I love the way you portrayed Lily. She's a lot of fun to read, and makes me want to know more about her. She seems to be pretty unpredictable, which always makes interesting characters. This story is fresh, in a sense. Can't wait for more.
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