I'm a little confused at this point, especially since you brought in all of the characters so quickly. I'll read it more carefully later, your characters do seem interesting, and your writing is great! I loved how you characterized Peter as someone who wasn't as stupid as a lot of the other fanfiction writers portray him as.

As you can see, I'm a huge stickler for creativity...and a huge hypocrite. Hopefully, you won't think me so. My own story is just beginning, so...right. No more blatant self-advertising.

Do forgive me, and keep up the great work,

sophianwin