This story has potential. It would help to leave spaces between the speakers and listeners in a converstion. A space is also needed between paragraphs. It would be a good idea to revise irregular verbs if you get the chance to do so. We all need reminders once in a while.
That was pretty decent...
But you need to get it betaed. The spelling and Grammar mistakes are pretty bad.
For instance the word is Conceited not conceded.
Its a really nice idea for a short fic but you may want to expand it a bit. For instance why does Hermione rant about Ron to Harry in the first place?
Secondly why is she thinking about this converastion when Harry is dying of all times. Wouldn't she think of Harry instead and what he means to her?
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