Ch.9 - - It's one thing to declare Harry her liege. It's another thing for Harry to start acting like her liege in the Harry way - total commitment down the chain, as well as it coming up the chain. Well, very well done. You made it happen in a very believable way.
Ch.8 - - This is moving along nicely. Hermione is astounded and Harry is determined. I love it when plan comes together. But Ron as a strict disciplinarian, exercising early in the morning - that's rich.
Ch.5 - - The liege part holds it own fascination - what a new concept. Seamus is well captured anf fleshed out. Ginny worries me as you have planned. -- "My reasons are my own,” Harry said with a smile. “But you're a friend, Seamus, and honestly, you'd make a bloody awful priest.” -- What a great two sentences!
Ch.3 - - I cannot remember if i have ever gotten excited about a chapter of fanfiction before. But THIS chapter cmpletely captured my imagination. I feel myself wanting to write fanfcition on IT. How brilliant, astounding, compelling, and captivating. The old school friends as mild mannered school teachers and tavern owners by day, and a secret force for truth, justice, and the wizarding way by night. I am enthralled.
Then you have the humor of the Albus/Harry conversation, the Gred and Forge factor, and fiannly a cliffie attack on the Burrow. What a powerful chapter.
Too bad I can't rate it higer than 10.
Oh good, oh how very, very good. My biggest complaint with HBP is the end of the DA, and now you are taking it beyond the years of Hogwarts. How terrifically clever. I wonder if I am going to get any sleep tonight.
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