Ouch! I have to take exception to that last crack of Ron's.  What? Is Eliza under an Imperius curse? (Just joking.)

You seem to be trying out some new adverbs.  'Buoyantly' (for a stressed person) don't seem to quite fit, but the others really add to the description.

Hmmm...an interesting turnabout.  First he's nice as can be, then he turns a bit narsty.  What's going to happen?

And (tee-hee) there's the laughs again--I just love the way you've made Ron fairly clueless.  You've captured the bro/sis relationship very well.

I like your explanation of why Dumbledore is using two underage mages for the task--fairly plausible--and sounds like a fitting task to start them off as members of the Order. 

And the humor, of course, is enjoyable.  Especially the 'Olly, and the crack about broomsticks in downtown London.

Okay, this is getting a little weird now.  Um, was that phone conversation between Harry and Ginny supposed to be repeated?  And this mad doctor is sretching things just a bit. 

I like the part about Catherine.  Very interesting that she could have been memory-wiped and working as a Muggle.  It's clever of you to have her think she's from another planet or dimension.  I can imagine that could happen to  person who didn't know who they were, but knew they were different from everyone else.  If she had seen stories of alien abduction and series like 'Lost' and X-Files on TV she could easily come to that conclusion.

This is so funny.  I love the stuff the Dursleys are making up about Harry.

"He recognizes our voices and he comes when we call him."--(tee hee) like Harry's a little dog!

And Vernon getting Mrs. Puttidi to donate money to his company--that is both gross and hilarious!

 And the ending is priceless!  Thanks.