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Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
02/17/2007 10:50 pm

Ouch! I have to take exception to that last crack of Ron's.  What? Is Eliza under an Imperius curse? (Just joking.)

You seem to be trying out some new adverbs.  'Buoyantly' (for a stressed person) don't seem to quite fit, but the others really add to the description.



Author's Response:

You know, you can write the rest of the story yourself if you want since I put it in an open series. I originally wrote this and the other installment for FictionAlley some time ago, but I never got around to finishing this one. Basically, I decided to put them here and see what other people would come up with since it looked like I wouldn't get around to finishing it anyway.




A Mission Like No Other
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
02/17/2007 10:41 pm

Hmmm...an interesting turnabout.  First he's nice as can be, then he turns a bit narsty.  What's going to happen?

And (tee-hee) there's the laughs again--I just love the way you've made Ron fairly clueless.  You've captured the bro/sis relationship very well.




A Mission Like No Other
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
02/17/2007 10:38 pm

I like your explanation of why Dumbledore is using two underage mages for the task--fairly plausible--and sounds like a fitting task to start them off as members of the Order. 

And the humor, of course, is enjoyable.  Especially the 'Olly, and the crack about broomsticks in downtown London.




A Mission Like No Other
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
02/17/2007 10:32 pm
Great beginning.  You set the stage with minimal verbiage, and a nice dose of smart-mouth.  I look forward to more.


A Mission Like No Other
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
02/13/2007 02:56 pm
'Six feet under what?' and the gun melting--you have excellent ideas.  And George and Fred are fun throughout.


An Emergency Like No Other
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
02/13/2007 02:54 pm

Okay, this is getting a little weird now.  Um, was that phone conversation between Harry and Ginny supposed to be repeated?  And this mad doctor is sretching things just a bit. 

I like the part about Catherine.  Very interesting that she could have been memory-wiped and working as a Muggle.  It's clever of you to have her think she's from another planet or dimension.  I can imagine that could happen to  person who didn't know who they were, but knew they were different from everyone else.  If she had seen stories of alien abduction and series like 'Lost' and X-Files on TV she could easily come to that conclusion.



Author's Response:

"Um, was that phone conversation between Harry and Ginny supposed to be repeated?"

He's playing a recording of their previous conversation.




An Emergency Like No Other
Reviewer: Spiderwort (Signed)
02/13/2007 02:43 pm

This is so funny.  I love the stuff the Dursleys are making up about Harry.

"He recognizes our voices and he comes when we call him."--(tee hee) like Harry's a little dog!

And Vernon getting Mrs. Puttidi to donate money to his company--that is both gross and hilarious!

 And the ending is priceless!  Thanks.




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