Author's Response: Thanks. I just thought a period piede would require more details than usual because of the unfamiliarity of everything from settings to characters :)
El Gaunt Herencia
Reviews For Dark Histories
Reviewer: Lionz_4_the_Cup (Signed)
03/05/2006 06:49 pm
muy bien! very good! great writing, lots of detail. good job.
Author's Response: Thanks. I just thought a period piede would require more details than usual because of the unfamiliarity of everything from settings to characters :)
Author's Response: Thanks. I just thought a period piede would require more details than usual because of the unfamiliarity of everything from settings to characters :)
Reviewer: LunaMoon224 (Signed)
03/05/2006 03:07 pm
You put a lot of detail into this, and it made it all more interesting. I happen to love Spanish, even though I only know a tiny bit. I loved the last line, the twist. Great job!!
Author's Response: *lol* I don't even know a bit of Spanish. I just thouoght the myth interesting. Those words... I cheated ^_^ On-line translators - makes me seem like the linguist that I'm not. Thankd for your review :)
Author's Response: *lol* I don't even know a bit of Spanish. I just thouoght the myth interesting. Those words... I cheated ^_^ On-line translators - makes me seem like the linguist that I'm not. Thankd for your review :)
El Gaunt Herencia
Reviewer: Moonlit Tiger Lily (Signed)
01/22/2006 05:06 pm
I really liked this chapter. It flowed continuously with the last one. Even though there were Merlin knows how many years in between it didn't feel like it at all. I think this is the best chapter so far. It really pulled me in. I hardly made any corrections on it comparitively. I think you're doing very well and that you deserved to win that contest. Congratulations!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your help. I does help to improve the flow. You corrected the last one really fast and your suggestion does help with the transistion. :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your help. I does help to improve the flow. You corrected the last one really fast and your suggestion does help with the transistion. :)
The Healer
Reviewer: Moonlit Tiger Lily (Signed)
01/21/2006 09:13 pm
You're doing very well, I'm glad to say. As your beta, I can tell more than any of your readers that you are improving. Unfortunately, historical stories don't seem to be very popular. I'm nearly done the next chapter. Hopefully your readers with increase!
Author's Response: Thanks Nicole. I just got it. Will post it ASAP.
Author's Response: Thanks Nicole. I just got it. Will post it ASAP.
*Squeals* I also just got word. This story is the winner for challenge it was written for :)
The Healer
Reviewer: Lionz_4_the_Cup (Signed)
01/11/2006 04:23 pm
Venice....interesting choice of a setting...awesome all the same, though:D great job, i was kind of surprised that
Nathaniel was related to Sirius.creative. awesome descriptions, too. overall, nice job. cant wait to read more!
Author's Response: ^_^ I always did find that city romantic, timeless and there’s just an air of dark mystery to it.
Author's Response: ^_^ I always did find that city romantic, timeless and there’s just an air of dark mystery to it.
*grin* the use of a ‘Black ancestor’ (especially one who’s a seer) will make sense once I reach the epilogue. At the same time it does give a more HP feel to this.
The Healer
Reviewer: LunaMoon224 (Signed)
01/11/2006 10:42 am
That was very interesting and intriguing at the same time. I love reading fics with Perenelle and Nicholas in them. I'm wondering what will happen next. Great job!!
Author's Response: Thanks. The next chapter is in queue. Nicolas, Perenelle and Nathaniel are more like narrators here… I just thought that a timeless alchemist, his wife, and a young man wizard of the renaissance era would make for a more well rounded narration.
Author's Response: Thanks. The next chapter is in queue. Nicolas, Perenelle and Nathaniel are more like narrators here… I just thought that a timeless alchemist, his wife, and a young man wizard of the renaissance era would make for a more well rounded narration.
The real plot line is more of the story of Ascelpius twisted by yours truly, so to fit HP. The next chapter is has more mythological aspects, but HP-ism will penetrate more and more at each passing chapter.
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